Anonymous — 2/5 — 8M ago

The plot jumps around, confusing the reader by changing the events. The main character isn’t believable. How a stifled young woman goes from being detail oriented to a master hacker is beyond me. There are many clarifications missing. The ending is the best part, as it links to the original story. The computer narrator does not pronounce the numbers and many less familiar words correctly. If someone were to sit down and strongly edit the story for continuity, it could be good. As is, l had to force myself to stick to it till the end.